I like the rhythm and flow of this track a lot over all, but I think it could really use a stronger musical backing, the intonation and pitch really doesn't really cut through the mix. I think it is because the bass has so many overtones bleeding through, I can tell what it should be doing but it doesn't quite the land the way it wants to. I think that also may have led to issues with the trancey pluck that comes in from the start and onward, not always feeling the tone.
I gave four stars because of the rhythmic cohesion and overall structure to the track, because I can see a lot of potential in it. But it needs to really find its place musically, and hopefully with that you can find the space to layer in some really strong breakdowns and transitions.
Keep at it friend, this is a solid start.